Script Extract

So I finally finished the first draft of my script (although I had some trouble with saving the file and then it wouldn't open) I plan to show it to a few people get their thoughts and then re draft it to make it better.

So here is the first draft:

SCENE 1 - INTERIOR - BEDROOM

CU of two hands can bee seen typing away on a keyboard of a
laptop, the camera pans slowly up to the screen were many
words are typed up and the cursor goes along as many more
appear on the screen.

Camera cuts to a CU of eyes focusing on the screen and
following along the cursor.

Camera cuts to a LS of the boy, Jack, who is frantically
typing away on the laptop, he wipes his face with his hands
and sighs.

Camera tracks along fading to black.

SCENE 2 - INTERIOR - LIBRARY

MS of a girl, Sian, is sitting at a table reading over a
text book and witting down notes. A boy sits down in front
of her.

Camera cuts to a MS of the boy as he buries his face in his
arms and exhales.

The girl looks up as if waiting for the boy to start
talking.

                    SIAN
          What’s wrong?

The boy looks up slightly

                    JACK
          I’m so exhausted from all the work

          we’ve been getting lately. Last
          night I stayed up to 4 in the
          morning.

                    SIAN
          Why? We have a while before it’s

due

                    JACK
          I know but if i don’t do it now

          then it will play on my mind and
          then I’ll start to get stressed

Sian interrupts Jack and goes back to looking at her books

(CONTINUED)

                    SIAN
          All work and no play makes

Jack interrupts her.
                    JACK

Shut up

Sian looks up again and gives a half a smile. She then sits
up and gives him her full attention

                    SIAN
          Listen, there is nothing wrong with

          having a little down time, you have
          loads of time before the work has
          to be in so just take a little
          break and recharge your batteries.

Jack looks off as if he is mulling her words over.
Fades to black.

SCENE 3 - INTERIOR - BEDROOM

CU of a closed laptop on the bed, it zooms out as Jack sits
down on his bed and opens it up. Just as he is about to
start work he gets a text from Sian, reading: Don’t forget
some you time ;)